I just noticed this subforum states any writing aspects of one's work so figure this can be asked here.
I'd love feedback on a fairly heavy rewrite (well 50% or so) of my blurb for my as-yet-to-be-published book 1 in my urban fantasy series (it's been pending since late spring/early summer, I set things aside for a while).
With great power comes... a HELLuva learning curve
My name is Gabriel Ash. A year ago I woke up in the smoldering ruins of my apartment. No burns. No cuts or bruises. No memory of what the heck happened.
Then, a guy who could give Methuselah a run for his money dumps another bucket of weird on me. Turns out, most of the things I thought were merely myths are real -- and I'm one of them.
An Heir.
It's not what you'd think. No trust fund. No deed to a charming fixer-upper. Just a crazy story and a front row seat to an eternal war.
I'd call BS on it but for the magic. Cool, right? Yeah, sure, until a diabolical douche starts playing puppet master with mortal souls and that magic puts me in the thick of it.
My only chance of stopping it is embracing a heritage I don’t understand with a cost I'm afraid to pay. It sucks, but I don't have a choice. If I fail, the city will become a demonic Ellis Island and then the sulfur will really hit the fan...
All feedback welcome (yes, even if you think it sucks). UF readers/writers opinions particularly welcome.