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Writer's Haven => Writer's Workshop [Public] => Topic started by: Neus on June 11, 2019, 08:29:48 AM
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Hello,
I would like to know how to write a scene in which the character is listening to a TV or radio interview:
Helena sat on the couch and grabbed a slice of pizza.
"I had never seen anything like this," said the witness.
"Could you describe it?" asked the journalist.
"It was like looking at the devil's face."
Helena got a chill and spilled the coke on the floor.
Should I tag it as if it were a dialogue like I did or shall I use another format (italics, different quoting marks...)?
I haven't found anything about this topic online. Thank you very much!
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Good question. If I had to decide right now, I'd probably go with italics. I'd also be sure to have Helena's sentences interspersed with the radio dialog frequently enough so that the reader doesn't start to glaze over all the italicized stuff.
Not completely sure, though, so you might want to solicit a few more responses before deciding.
Also, welcome to the site. :cheers
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What Jeff said - I'd probably use italics. If I could be sure the formatting would stick, I might also indent all the "overhead" stuff to make it clear it was separate from the rest of the text.
That said, I write fantasy, so no direct experience. Grin
Also, what Jeff said - welcome!
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I have used italics for cellphone conversation in my sixth fantasy novelette. I also used round braces for interruptions like coughing. I also used italics for email conversations in the seventh episode.
Oh, and I don't use italics elsewhere while story telling.
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I use italics for texts and in my latest book (WW2 Era) letters. Conversations via phone or skype I treat as normal dialogue, just add some details to make sure the reader knows how they are communicating and make it realistic
Cellphone:
"What?" Jack said. "I couldn't hear that."
Skype:
"Okay," Jill said. She wanted to reach through the screen and touch him, but she couldn't, he was 3000 miles away. She couldn't believe she wouldn't see him for another two weeks.
I've done TV and radio the same way. I think I used Italics for song lyrics coming out of the radio once, (don't worry I wrote the lyrics) but the DJ was in quotes. Maybe that was completely wrong, I'm not sure. I think the most important thing is that it is clear to the reader who is talking.
Helena sat on the couch and grabbed a slice of pizza. No one said anything to her, she didn't even get a nod. Everyone focused on the TV.
"I had never seen anything like this," said the witness.
"Could you describe it?" asked the journalist.
"It was like looking at the devil's face."
Helena got a chill and spilled the coke on the floor.
Honestly without you explaining that it was on TV, outside of the text, I don't know if I would have known where the witness and journalist were, sorry.
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So much of the dialogue in my mystery stories is cell phone conversations that using italics would be cumbersome for me and tiresome for the reader. I write such dialogue as with any other conversation except that I mention one way or the other at the beginning that it's a phone call and whether it's "on speaker" so the reader will know whether other characters are privy to the exchange. At the end, I have them "ring off."
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I'd use both italics and indent the whole of the TV/radio excerpt.
I wouldn't do this for overhearing conversations. That's be part of the regular narrative.
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I minimize the amount of italics, so I wouldn't use it for phone/radio/TV. I do use it for song lyrics/poetry/letters/psychic communication.
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A thought for you all... :thinking
I have a rough draft where the protagonist is talking to her friend over phone. It's in italics. During the course of the conversation her friend doesn't listen to a sentence properly. So, she asks the sentence to be repeated. The protagonist shouts out the words. So, I wrote that particular sentence alone in italicized capital letters. I presumed that the reader will appreciate this subtle style.
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When in doubt, ask CMoS, the Chicago Manual of Style.
Or come up with something that works for you, isn't confusing to the reader, or annoying to type. Be consistent. And limit it. Italics is fine in small doses, but huge blocks of it is tiring to read.
You can't count on special formatting to hold, so indenting, as one could do well in a print book, often comes out odd, if it works at all. So, keep to the standard ways of doing stuff, and it will work out.